Setting
The story took place in Oriental plaza in Johannesburg. This was in South Africa during Apartheid time . The shops in this shopping centre were owned by Indians. This was a time that the new government took over.
Main character
The main character was Mrs Nebo. The was a wife to a new official. She was rich and she was of high class. The was also of medium height with a smoothed skin complexion. She had heavy loins and she had a friend called Mgaret.
Plot
Mrs Nebo and her friend Margaret came out of the Mercedes benz. They entered the shopping center and they were followed by two bodyguards. They looked arounnd and they bought shoes and jewellery. They came accross a shop were Mrs Nebo found a nice dress. She wanted it to look prety on her so she also wanted a matching scarf. She couldnt find one in the same shop she found the garment. They walked from shop to shop and they came to Mr Sakurs shop were Mrs Nebo saw the matching silk scarf.
Mrs Nebo reached for the money in her bag and unfortunately it was not enough. She told mr sakur that she could pay with a cheque. Mr sakur told her that he does not accept cheques, as Mrs Nebo was used to paying with cheque to other shops, she couldnt understand the shopkeeper. She felt insulted as she had a lot of money. With Margaret defending her friend and everything they and the other people say, Mr Sakur was not afraid and he kept stuck to his rule. The other shopkeepers decided to buy the scarf as a gift to Mrs Nebo and she was very happy.
You seem to have understood the story but you really have to work on your grammar and avoid making run-on sentences. The other thing is that Mrs. Nebo as a main character is not clearly described. Lastly, you were supposed to talk about Mr Sakur since he was also a main character. Therefore you deserve 2/10
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